Notes for writers

[copper-telluride]

I made this thread as opposed to posting in each individual writing thread because it makes more sense from my standpoint to be able to post general notes in a centralized topic.

Anyway! This is for any random notes I think of for writers to consider as they write.

Kin:
-For the shopping event, Kin has made it her principle never to wear dresses, no matter what (due to a few unfortunate events on the streets), so the outfit she tries on in the store should be something like a frilly hip-length shirt and some jean shorts or something -- be creative!

Fumiko:
-The order of events, just to clarify, goes Cooking I --> Fight with Ai --> Cooking II (--> Tomohiro's Cake only if the player has gotten at least two affection points up to that point) -->Shopping --> Preparation for the mission (the dialogue choice only appears if the player has gotten at least five affection points up to that point) --> Alien attack (the option to save Fumiko yourself only appears if the player has gotten ALL affection points possible up to that point).
For the Good End branch, everyone returns safely (Hiroaki leaves to search for Kotone at this point), Tomo and Fumi find Fumi's parents' lab and Fumi leaves the recording for them, and finally there's the last event, involving a bit of narration from Tomohiro's perspective about how the two of them ended up years in the future, then Fumiko coming home and the two of them sharing an embrace.
For the Bad End branch, Tomo is too scared so he shouts for someone else to save Fumiko, and eventually Fumiko dies in a tragic lab accident, causing Tomo to commit suicide.

I'll update with more notes as they come to mind.

[copper-telluride]

Fumiko: The secret behind Tomohiro's invisibility will be explored/revealed in Fumiko's route, in an event where he goes in for a checkup and an MRI/fMRI/the future equivalent of an MRI reveals an abnormality in his physiology.

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Tsukiko: Just some clarification on Tsukiko's personality -- she normally acts as "normal" and cheerful as possible but, due to her only knowledge of emotion coming not from true understanding but from learning-based AI programming, anyone who attempts to engage her in conversation will almost immediately realize that she's not normal.

Just thought I'd get that out there so that Neebles doesn't write her as some cold, heartless robot. While she does come across as cuttingly frank and curt, she does so with a smile on her face, in her best imitation of emotion she knows how.

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Ai: The reason she invites Tomohiro to go shopping with her all of a sudden is because she's just starting to experience love for the first time, and she thinks that Tomohiro will like her (more) if she dresses up in pretty clothes for him. Of course, this isn't entirely the case (Tomo doesn't value fashion at all, hardly -- he places importance on personality first, looks second, with clothing choice a distant third), but Ai doesn't know that.

[roccoco]

I guess here would be a good enough place to do this.

BUT

I dunno if anyone else has seen this:



around tumblr but I think it would be pretty useful exercise for the writers to better flesh out their respective girls. Obv. you don't have to have everything on the list but I think it would help give the girls more depth as people to actually consider the things on the list.

What do you guys think?